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The best way for governments to solve the problem of traffic congestion is to provide free public transport in 24 hours per day, and seven days a week. Do you agree or disagree ?

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It is sometimes argued that free and available public transportation services operating in twenty four hours a day is considered as one of the most effective ways to alleviate the increasing
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 congestion today.While I accept that
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 approach is good in some ways, I believe there are equally effective measures to solve
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 problem. I believe it is a good idea for governments to provide public transport free of charge.
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 act might greatly produce a real opportunity for citizens to use free public transportation whenever they need, which will be able to limit the levels of noise and exhaust fumes caused by private vehicles.
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seems
o positively make a meaningful contribution to decreasing many negative impacts causing global warming and the greenhouse effect.
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, mass transit se
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seems
o be capable of accommodating a huge number of passengers commuting at the same time of day, which might greatly help the government to reduce thousands of people moving on rush hours.
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, the Japanese government has invested an amount of money devoted to improving infrastructure and public service in recent years for the purpose of producing a real chance for citizens to travel freely and experience a strong sense of satisfaction of travelling.
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, I would argue that there are equally effective methods of dealing with congested traffic. The
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 reason is to put more intense concentration on the construction of
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roads
a road
ith the aim of making transport network smoother and speedier.By stimulating the development of
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infrastructure, including
reeway and highway overpasses, the authorities will be able to minimize the decreasing congestion in transportation during rush hour. Another solution is to effectively impose flexible time frames upon students and em
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a worker who is hired to perform a job
employees
employers
ith the intention of inhibiting a large number of those people spilling on the
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 at the same time.
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, in Thailand, many schools have a tendency to set a flexible class schedule for students to leave school earlier than white-collar workers, so those schools will directly contribute to contending with a huge number of people moving during peak hour. In conclusion, I believe apart from making public transit available, there are equally effective ways to make sure that the government could deal with traffic congestion effectively
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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