MANY WORKING PEOPLE GET LITTLE OR NO EXERCISE EITHER DURING THE WORKING DAY OR IN THEIR FREE TIME, AND HAVE HEALTH PROBLEMS AS A RESULT. WHY DO MANY WORKING PEOPLE NOT GET ENOUGH EXERCISE? WHAT CAN BE DONE ABOUT THIS PROBLEM?

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Eventhough

Suggestion

Even though

working out have many

benifts

financial assistance in time of need

benefits

on people lifestyle and health, we still see a high percentage who

don't excercise

Suggestion

doesn't exercise

don't exercise

.In result, we notice people who don't

excersice

the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit

exercise

exercises

exercised

at least twice a week will have health problems.

Linking Words

FIrst

preceding all others in time or space or degree

First

of all, preserving

time

Use synonyms

excersice

the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit

exercise

exorcise

twice a week or more can be easy to manage.

Alot

Suggestion

A lot

of people lack the knowledge on how much

excersice

the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit

exercise

will eliminate health problems,

therfore

(used to introduce a logical conclusion) from that fact or reason or as a result

therefore

therefor

we can notice based on statistics that people who are in mid 30's preserve more

time

Use synonyms

for

excersing

the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit

exercising

Secondly

Linking Words

majority

Suggestion

the majority

of people

perfer

like better; value more highly

prefer

spending free

time

Use synonyms

with family and friends.

For example

Linking Words

, people will prefer going to the bar or watching Netflix at home with family over

excersing

the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit

exercising

. In conclusion, people don't have enough education and knowledge about the importance of exercising.

Also

Linking Words

, people lack the skills of

time

Use synonyms

managment

the act of managing something

management

. I suggest having educational sessions in schools and

workplace

Suggestion

the workplace

workplaces

that explain the importance of preserving

time

Use synonyms

for

excersing

the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit

exercising

at home or at the gym. In instance, having educational sessions will improve the

time

Use synonyms

mangement

the act of managing something

management

skills and more people will include

excersing

the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit

exercising

accessing

in their weekly schedule.

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4
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
18
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

182 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Time constraints
Sedentary lifestyle
Passive leisure activities
Workplace wellness programs
Active commuting
Subsidized
Public awareness
Health benefits
Incentivizing
Accessible public spaces

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