MANY WORKING PEOPLE GET LITTLE OR NO EXERCISE EITHER DURING THE WORKING DAY OR IN THEIR FREE TIME, AND HAVE HEALTH PROBLEMS AS A RESULT. WHY DO MANY WORKING PEOPLE NOT GET ENOUGH EXERCISE? WHAT CAN BE DONE ABOUT THIS PROBLEM?

Eventhough
Suggestion
Even though
working out have many
benifts
financial assistance in time of need
benefits
on people lifestyle and health, we still see a high percentage who
don't excercise
Suggestion
doesn't exercise
don't exercise
.In result, we notice people who don't
excersice
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
exercises
exercised
at least twice a week will have health problems.
FIrst
preceding all others in time or space or degree
First
of all, preserving
time
to
excersice
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
exorcise
twice a week or more can be easy to manage.
Alot
Suggestion
A lot
of people lack the knowledge on how much
excersice
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
will eliminate health problems,
therfore
(used to introduce a logical conclusion) from that fact or reason or as a result
therefore
therefor
we can notice based on statistics that people who are in mid 30's preserve more
time
for
excersing
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercising
.
Secondly
,
majority
Suggestion
the majority
of people
perfer
like better; value more highly
prefer
spending free
time
with family and friends.
For example
, people will prefer going to the bar or watching Netflix at home with family over
excersing
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercising
. In conclusion, people don't have enough education and knowledge about the importance of exercising.
Also
, people lack the skills of
time
managment
the act of managing something
management
. I suggest having educational sessions in schools and
workplace
Suggestion
the workplace
workplaces
that explain the importance of preserving
time
for
excersing
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercising
at home or at the gym. In instance, having educational sessions will improve the
time
mangement
the act of managing something
management
skills and more people will include
excersing
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercising
accessing
in their weekly schedule.

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