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Nowadays in many countries people are spending too much on weddings some people think that it is essential to spend a huge amount of money on wedding ceremonies others think that have to be simple and not very grand discuss both views and give your opinion

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Weddings embark a very important
day
 in every person's life,
moreover
, is a ceremony celebrated across every culture in the world. Some people prefer to have a lavish wedding and they do not mind spending a lot of
money
 on it. Others opine that
such
 celebrations are a waste of their hard earned
money
. In my opinion,
this
 special
day
 can be celebrated in a budgeted manner and one can save
this
money
 and use it for better purposes. An elaborate wedding does create a lot of memories for the couple as well as their friends and families to cherish for a lifetime.
For example
, a big fat
punjabi
the Indic language spoken by most people in Punjab in northwestern India
Punjabi
 wedding in
indian
a member of the race of people living in America when Europeans arrived
Indian
 culture has four days of events with a gathering of over 400 people.
This
 extravagant wedding gives an opportunity for families and friends to get together and celebrate the happy
day
.
Consequently
, many people spend huge amounts of
money
 to maintain their status and show off their wealth.
On the other hand
, few cultures mark
this
day
 with a small gathering and save the
moeny
the most common medium of exchange; functions as legal tender
money
 which could be used for the future of the couple themselves. The
money
 saved could be used for buying a house or an investment for children's education. Another disadvantage of lavish weddings is that they spur competition. When someone holds a luxurious wedding, it pressurizes the
neighbourded
 to conduct and maintain
similar setting
Suggestion
similar settings
 for their own children which sometimes leads to people taking
loan
Suggestion
loans
 and paying off debts later on. To conclude,
although
 many people believe that spending a lot of
money
 for marriages would bring happiness and contentment, I personally think that
such
 occasions are a waste of
money
. Saving
this
money
 for use in the future is a much better idea.
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