The table below shows how many students of a school in the UK chose to take part in four different sports between 2001 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how many students of a school in the UK chose to take part in four different sports between 2001 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph demonstrates the number of
students
of a particular UK school who participated in running, basketball, swimming and football over a ten-year period from 2001 to 2011.
Overall
, what stands out from the graph is that
while
the popularity of running grew over the duration in question, and that of football remained high throughout, the number of
students
interested in basketball fell sharply. Swimming figures, meanwhile, saw an increase followed by a drop. With regards to running and swimming, the starting figures were roughly identical at 18 and 20 participating
students
respectively.
However
,
whereas
the former climbed to reach 60
students
in 2007 before levelling off for the remainder of the period, the latter peaked at 50
students
in 2006 and
then
slipped to half
this
figure in 2011. Turning to the ball sports, football stayed consistently popular, with student figures remaining between 60 and 70 throughout the term. Basketball’s popularity was nearly as high as football’s in the first half of the decade studied, with the number of participating
students
rising from 55 to 61, but 2006 to 2008 saw The student numbers
crash
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21, a figure which had not changed until 2011.

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  • participation rate
  • trend
  • increase/decrease
  • year-on-year comparison
  • peak
  • lowest point
  • gender distribution
  • new entrants
  • drop in participation
  • continuation/discontinuation
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