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Online shopping is increasing dramatically. How could this trend affect our environment and the kinds of jobs required?

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Online shopping has become more popular than ever before in recent years.
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 trend may have positive impacts on the environment and employment patterns in the short run, but it may do more harm than good in the long run.
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, in terms of the environment, the popularity of online shopping can help reduce the figure of car journeys to physical stores and the amount of associated greenhouse emissions. A delivery truck,
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, is able to carry large amounts of goods, which, if carried by private cars, would require hundreds of trips, emitting huge amounts of carbon emissions into the atmosphere. In the long term,
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, the convenience of shopping on the Internet might encourage people to buy more, and
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 will increase the number of delivery vehicles on the road, releasing more exhaust fumes and heat-trapping gases.
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, if people consume more, there will be more waste ending up in landfills, which are one of the largest sources of global greenhouse gas emissions.
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, regarding the effects on the types of jobs in the labour market, the growing popularity of online shopping has created various new employment opportunities,
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 as online grocery personal shoppers, delivery drivers and web designers. Looking into the future,
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, the growth of
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 kind of shopping might lead to the bankruptcy of many traditional retailers, forcing thousands of people to face unemployment. The proportion of jobless people might outnumber the number of job openings created by the rapid development of online shopping, resulting in a higher level of unemployment. In conclusion, the growth of online shopping might be beneficial for the environment and the labour market in the short run;
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, in the long term, the benefits might be overshadowed by the negative consequences.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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