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Wild animal have no place in 21 century, so protecting them is a waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#place #century #waste #resources
Some people argue that it is pointless to spend money on saving
animals'life
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animals' life
,
Accept space
,
 because we human have no need them at all. I completely disagree with
this
 opinion. We must understand that all
lifes
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life
lives
files
in
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on
 earth
are
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is
 equal, so we definitely have no right to exploit their live.In addiction,
animals
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animal
 protection can help maintain the biodiversity and ecological balance.
For example
, the pest will attack the agriculture products if their natural enemy is absent.That means the ecosystem plays a vital role in human society. I
also
 think that action of protesting animals beneficial for teaching the younger generations.Because it always shows a positive influence on our society.When parents play a better behave, their kids will follow their model parents,
then
 shape their behaviour from a young age.If not,
next
 generations are more likely to ignore the lives of animals, just same as their parents.Without doubt, the vicious cycle continues. In conclusion, I strongly believe that protecting animals is beneficial for both animals themselves and we human beings, and we should do what we can to protect them.
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