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‘It is important for foreigners to know something about the history and culture of the country they live in.’ Discuss.

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“When in Rome – do as
romans
Suggestion
the romans
 do”,
this
 proverb is true for sure. People who migrate to foreign countries should have some basic knowledge about their
culture
 and heritage. In my opinion, it is necessary for new immigrants to learn and aware of the
history
 and
culture
 about their residing land. Due to lack of understanding foreigner face lot of issues like conflicts with local people, difference of opinion and legal tussles. Conflicting with locals is a general problem which is being
face
Suggestion
faced
 by the foreigners and it is seen
as a result
 so unawareness about
culture
.
For instance
, once I visited a famous temple in Thiruvananthapuram where a certain dress code is strictly followed and I found a huge quarrel between the administrator and the foreign visitor about their attire. As per the locals the dress which they are wearing was inappropriate to wear inside the temple.
This
 type of issues can be easily avoided if the new immigrants knew about the
culture
 and
history
. Another bigger issue which is being faced by
foreigner
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foreigners
a foreigner
 is different kinds of opinion, even in the working environment. There
are
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is
 a drastic change in work
culture
 when compare to western countries and Europe, people find it difficult to cope up and end up in
altercation
Suggestion
an altercation
the altercation
altercations
 between their managers.
This
 is again due to lack of knowledge about
history
 and
culture
 as well as
misperceptions
. Say
for example
, Even though India had been ruled by various empires for so many years, but still it has its own
culture
 being
persist
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persisted
. Managers
are tends
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are tended
are tending
tend
 to behave in authoritative manner which is unacceptable by
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
 western country where
manager
Suggestion
the manager
 behaves like co-worker rather than
boss
Suggestion
the boss
a boss
bosses
. Foreigners
are frequently got
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are frequently getting
frequently get
 into legal issues as they are unaware about rules and regulations in their residing land.
For example
, smoking in public areas and public display of love and affection with their partner or spouse are strictly prohibited in some countries. Due to unawareness new immigrants get into legal conflicts. To conclude, it is extremely advisable for
foreigner
Suggestion
foreigners
a foreigner
 to aware of
past
Suggestion
the past history
history
 and local
culture
 of the country they are residing.
This
 can certainly help them to avoid various conflicts and legal
tussels
disorderly fighting
tussles
.
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