labour-saving devices such as dishwashers and communication tools such as computer are supposed to make our lives easier. However some people argue that these devices only make them more difficult. Does modern technology reduce or increase stress?

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are adding complexity to human
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that these devices make our
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some light on the benefits
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gained by common people like
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and international students
while
using these technologies.
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with, household appliances have been playing a vital role in sharing manual work and
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time
. Especially, home makers are loaded with lots of activities,
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physical
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and
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exhausted state which makes
them
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difficult to balance their family
life
and personal needs. But, when they are using modern
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such
as
dishwasher
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, microwave
oven
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ovens
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, washing
machine
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etc., they could save
time
and energy and use their valuable
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time for
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activity
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such
as spending quality
time
with
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or personal grooming activities.
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in-turns make them feel relaxed and refreshed. A recent study conducted by the health care department in India stated that less workload gradually reduces
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50% of the cortisol level production. Another important sector where technology is considered
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a boon is
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communication,
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to connect people from various countries regardless of boundaries. In
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days, the person who
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to travel abroad
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away from their family for different
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such
as study or work,
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it very difficult to communicate back and eventually
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on
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home sick. But,
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with the help of advanced technology
such
as mobile
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enabled
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internet
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makes
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it
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to connect visually and for cheaper prices. So,
this
makes their
life
easier and
stress free
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. In conclusion, even though advancement
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some minor drawback,
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technologies
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the way to live a stress-free
life
and save
time
and energy.
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