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Band 7.5

You want to sell some of your furniture. You think a friend of yours might like to buy it from you. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • explain why you are selling • describe the furniture • suggest a date when your friend can come and see the furniture

#furniture #friend #date
Dear Sejal, I hope
this
 letter finds you well. I am writing
this
 letter about the bed I bought recently, but want to sell it as it does not fit in my room.
However
,I wanted to give it back to the store.
Then
 I realised, I bought it on a deal which is quite cheaper than the regular price, so why not sell it to someone who maybe needs it? At that moment you came into my mind. Do you remember I sent you an online link to a bed a few days ago?
This
 bed is a bit similar to that. Let me give you a brief information about it. So
this
 bed is square in shape and brown in colour and it is not only cheaper in price but
also
 has an attached soft mattress
along with
 the bed, which is very soft and comfortable. I have taken off from the office
this
 Monday, why don't you come over and see it in person? It's been a
while
 since we met. Hoping to see you soon. Jan
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Task Achievement
Consider expanding your explanation as to why the bed doesn't fit in your room for clearer context.
Coherence and Cohesion
Adding transitions or connecting phrases between paragraphs could further improve the flow of your letter.
Task Achievement
You have successfully identified and adhered to the informal tone suitable for a letter to a friend.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your letter has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion, presenting the information logically.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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