The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given pie-charts
compares
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the four different categories for their e-
sales
amongst
the
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Canadian retailers in the
years
2005 and 2010.
Overall
, it is evident that online
sales
of
the
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electronic items and home furnishers dropped,
however
, the craze for food and
the
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video games increased during five
years
period.
To begin
with, in
year
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2005,
the
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electronics and appliances had a total of 35% retailed online
sales
that made over one-
third
of the
the
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total
sales
. In 2010,
however
, these dropped to 30%.
Similarly
, a dramatic drop in the popularity of home furnishers was observed over five
years
time that plunged to 15% from 25%.
On the other hand
, a tremendous boost was noted
amongst
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the online
sales
of Food and beverages which rose to 32% in 2010 from 22% in 2005. The public craze for online shopping of video games
also
showed
considerable
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rise that increased from 18% to 23% over a period of five
years
respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, sales with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • distribution
  • percentage
  • sector
  • sales figures
  • revenue
  • growth
  • decline
  • stable
  • significant
  • leading
  • least performing
  • comparison
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • online shopping
  • retail sectors
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