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In many countries the proportion of old people is steadily increasing. some think this is good, while others believe this is a problem for a country. discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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crease i
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An increase
n ol
d p
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the older
older
opulation in many countries, is a sign of advanced medical technology. Recently I had a visit to ja
pan,
a constitutional monarchy occupying the Japanese Archipelago; a world leader in electronics and automobile manufacture and ship building
Japan
I found la
rge number o
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a large number
f elderly people and I asked my
f
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My
riend about the reason behind
such
 healthy old people. He explained me few po
ints a
railroad track having two movable rails and necessary connections; used to turn a train from one track to another or to store rolling stock
Points
nd I have to mention it here.
Firstly
, they have clear food habits and pr
oper e
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Proper
xercise,
such
 as quantitative meat consumption and routine fat burning ac
tivities.
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Activities
I got really surprised, they are known for their discipline.
On the other hand
, do they are really a problem to
o
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for
in
ur country? I could not agree with that, si
nce e
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for
lderly people nowhere affect younger generation,
such
 as jobs and medical subsidiary. In fact, they are the examples of our nation’s policy, which keep them happy and alive.
For Instance
, if the country has average living age of 70 years, it will be directly questionable to country’s medical policy. At the same time elderly people cannot be considered as a workforce and government’s spending on pension will be higher. To adjust the ratio, country should encourage growth in population, which could reduce young versus ol
d ratio.
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the old ratio
It is
also
 in our faith and tradition, elderly people should be treated in ri
ght manner a
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the right manner
nd they were part of the nation’s development. They are not the burden and find the right solution to tackle the issue will be the proper way. To come an
c
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a
onclusion, I feel old aged people are the nation’s asset and should not be felt as a burden and increasing population could be the right approach.

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