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transport preferences among young people from different countries

#transport #preferences #people #countries
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The
chart
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 shows us the tra
nport pr
move something or somebody around; usually over long distances
transport
eferences among young people from different countries. There are three countries' data's given from Europe, and oth
er one sh
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the other one
ows us the USA's trends in terms of
transportation
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 preferences among young people.
Firstly
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, when we look at the
cha
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rt we ca
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chart, we
n see that car using dramatically differs from all the other two options; mot
orcyle an
a motor vehicle with two wheels and a strong frame
motorcycle
d bicycle preferences for all countries that has been compared except the Germany. For other options of
transportation
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, preferences differs in different countries. While Great Britain and France use
s bi
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use
c
ycle fo
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bicycles
r the
second
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 option of
transportation
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, in the USA motorcycle comes as
second
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 preference. We can easily say
by
express in words
tell
 examining the
chart
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 that, while Eru
pean co
of or relating to or characteristic of Europe or the people of Europe
European
untries prefers the nature-friendly
transport
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 options after cars, American
youth
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 prefers motor vehicles more than nature-friendly options. When we exa
mining th
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are examining
examine
e
chart
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 more precisely country by country, we can say that the car using as
transportation
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 is mostly popular among French young-population, it is over seventy percentages out of other opi
tons. O
the right to buy or sell property at an agreed price; the right is purchased and if it is not exercised by a stated date the money is forfeited
options
nly about thirty per
cantages of
a proportion in relation to a whole (which is usually the amount per hundred)
percentage
percentages
youth
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 population uses other
transport
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 options, the order of oth
er two options li
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the other two options
ne up as bic
ycle an
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a bicycle
d motorcycle, both about ten percentages, not dramatically dif
ferantiated.
made different (especially in the course of development) or shown to be different
differentiated
differentiate
 After French, Great Britian and USA comes equally in terms of car using as
tra
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nsport am
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a transport
ong you
g pe
(used of living things especially persons) in an early period of life or development or growth
young
ople, both countries use
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use
rs as
transportation
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 at the same
percentage
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, about %60. While bicycling comes
secondly
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 at the Great Britian, thirty
percentage
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 among
youth
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 population, in USA motorcycle being preferred as much as the preference of bicycling in Great Britian; %30. We can say that over half
percentage
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 of young people using cars as
transportation
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 in France, Great Britain and the USA. There's an exception about Germany. Among young people in Germany, we can see that the cars are not the
first
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 option, fou
rty pe
being ten more than thirty
forty
rcent of
youth
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 uses cars as
tra
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nsport vehicle wh
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a transport vehicle
ile over fou
rty
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a forty percentage
forty percentage
percentage
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 of them use bcy
cle.
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a bicycle
bicycle
bicycles
cycle
The dis
trubition be
(statistics) an arrangement of values of a variable showing their observed or theoretical frequency of occurrence
distribution
tween pre
fences of
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the preferences
preferences
transport
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 vehicles is more normal than the other countries that has been given in the
chart
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. Nature friendly
transportation
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 seems more general in Germany. In the
chart
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 we can easily see that the Germany is the only country in terms of using different types of tra
nsportaion as
a facility consisting of the means and equipment necessary for the movement of passengers or goods
transportation
 much as cars; more traditional ones.

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