Which subjects may no longer be taught at secondary school?

Music and Art are two subjects which are not part of the obligatory entrance exams in high schools and universities, except specialized ones.
This
is the reason why,
such
kind of disciplines, along with sports and even geography and history, are often neglected, and they are not given the necessary attention from the students. Art and Music comprise important content not only for one’s general knowledge, but they could
also
be an area for future self-improvement. In today’s educational
system
, the most important thing is to get
excellent grade
Suggestion
excellent grades
on finals, and of course,
this
could be done only when one’s test results are fitting to the
system
requirements. Creativity and originality are not recommended aside from specialized classes.
It’s
Suggestion
Its
Art and Music, on which our children’s ingenuity and inspiration are based.
This
impulse, created in Art and Music classes, is
catalyzer
Suggestion
a catalyzer
for their growth in every future direction of development. In support of above-mentioned is a research in "Neuroeducation: Learning, Arts and the Brain," in which Johns Hopkins researchers shared findings showing that arts education can help to boost the brain in positive ways. From my personal standpoint, it is absolutely necessary these subjects to be a part of our educational
system
, no matter of
grade
(Christian theology) a state of sanctification by God; the state of one who is under such divine influence
grace
. It is important to notice, that there is no strictly defined age limit under which one should have outlined for
himself his personal
Suggestion
himself, his personal
interests and direction of development.
Therefore
, all the studied subjects are fields for potential personal
evolvement
the act of sharing in the activities of a group
involvement
for students.
In addition
, Music and Arts stimulate the brain and improve the memory. They
also
develop critical thinking, evolve cognitive functions and help students to perform better academically. I believe that our educational
system
is strong enough and there will be no need for cost savings at the cost of Music and Art.
This
will be lost for our children and for our society in their entirety.
Submitted by anita.gyurova on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: