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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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Some years ago students that finished their university degree decided to
study
inside
Suggestion
in
 their
country
.
However
, these days opportunities of
study
 outside are improving. Obvious benefits can be observed from
this
 statement, the drawbacks should not be ignored.
To begin
 with, several advantages can be found when people decide to
study
 outside their
country
. Many countries of the world offer a better status situation for people’s
life
. Most of the students that decide to
study
 outside their
country
 are trying to find a better future
life
 and offer their family a better
life
 situation. To talk about
life
 situations is not just economically, it includes that they are trying to find an environment where they can feel safe and comfortable.
Additionally
, these students have the capacity to
study
 at a harder level than they are, improving their skills and teaching them how to get what they want. Another advantage is that
this
 experience can bring to the students to know about other cultures, living with people from other countries of the world, sharing their traditions.
On the other
hand are
Accept comma addition
hand, are
 the disadvantages. Most of these students had never travelled or lived outside their
country
 before.
This
 means that it will be difficult to learn how to live in a new
country
 in their own way. As well, living far away from their family will make them feel sad, but they should remember that everything that they are doing is to help them. To sum up, the improvement of
study
 outside brings
to
Suggestion
in
 people to have a better
life
 situation status than staying in their own
country
.
However
, students should know that
this
 will be difficult because they are going to live a new great experience without their family close.
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