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Today technology and robots replace people in many areas. Why do you think this is a case? Is it a positive or negative development?

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Due to the fast pace of life, dramatic advancement in robotic
technology
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 have been triggering the automation of
wide range
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a wide range
 of workplaces. There are some reasons behind
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 tendency and despite some negatives that could be originated from
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 propensity, I am of the opinion that
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 is mostly a positive development. The most predominant reason
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for
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 trend is because of the efficiency rate in
workplace
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the workplace
workplaces
. It is apparent that self-governing
technology
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 could
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 the tasks at
higher rate
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a higher rate
higher rates
 and efficacy than human beings. Another prominent factor is
accuracy
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an accuracy
the accuracy
 which might eliminate the errors stemming from human factor. In some cases, I admit that utilization of robots
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 of humans might affect all portions of almost all jobs to some extent. Especially, the jobs that require
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greater
 level of human
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
 are most probable field that could be replaced by robots.
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,
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 tendency might boost the unemployment rates in these kind of particular job fields.
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, it is projected that in a foreseeable future highly skilled robots would be available to everyone and people could utilize them in homework.
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, people’s ability of doing
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
 demanding jobs could be decreased and
less skillful human generation
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the less skilful human generation
less skilful human generation
 might be ineluctable in future.
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, positive outcomes of
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 improvement in
technology
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 are much more striking.
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 of all, the precision and accuracy level could be boosted in industry sectors with the help of self-automating
technology
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, in which a little deflection and deviation from human parameter in any data could lead to hazardous accidents. What is more, usage of artificial intelligence might improve healthcare standards and surgical operations could be performed with low level risk of death rate.
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, the development in robotic areas could encourage many young people to direct to the computer science and machine learning which provokes the invention and advent of much more intelligent machines that could serve the
wellbeing
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well being
 of humanity. To summarize, albeit the
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above mentioned
 negative sides of the replacement of robot
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 with humans, I do believe that
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 tendency would be
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in
 the
favor
promote over another
favour
 of
people
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the people
.

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