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Now many big cities in the world are increasing in size. What are the problems associated with it? What are the solutions to these problems?

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In the race of economy to reach higher heights many big cities in the world are increasing in size and here are some of the problems. Recently Jakarta was in news that 95 % of North Jakarta will be submerged in sea and one of the reasons for it is deforestation. People with the desire to have a standard of living better are looking for more land resulting in them cutting of more trees and when
that is
 happening water is not being stopped by anything so whenever a natural calamity happens those houses near sea is getting submerged and
this
 is the primary reason why Jakarta is facing the same situation.
This
 has made Indonesia
think
Suggestion
thinks
 about moving their capital from Jakarta and news like
this
 will not only damper people, but will have blown to the country economical growth. Another, the problem is urbanization will happen making us forget local
culture
. Recently it was news that, nearly 10 local languages of Singapore have become extinct with hardly anyone speaking because local native speaks would have got moved into
city
Suggestion
the city
a city
 during city widening and in order to survive in the competitive world they would have learned a new language. Solutions is, stop cutting of trees, preserve our natural resources. The government should make a law about having a limitation of extension of
city
Suggestion
the city
. People should be encouraged to preserve local
culture
, language and support it by learning and getting aware of
culture
Suggestion
the culture
. Initiation of programs to showcase the local
culture
, make necessary arrangements so that it will be able to reach a wider audience. Now we can use social media for that which is nowadays extremely resourceful and helpful. Record those
culture
Suggestion
cultures
 and language, introduce it in school and in other medium which can be reached to more pupil.
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