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Some people think that the government should provide assistance to all kinds of artists including painters, musicians and poets etc. However, other people think that it is a waste of money. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #government #assistance #kinds #artists #painters #musicians #poets #waste #money
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Nowadays
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government
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the government
 is providing many facilities to their people. There are some people who think that
government
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 has to provide
support
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 to the struggling artists like painter, singer and poets. While others believe that if
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government
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governments
the government
 give assistance to those artists
then
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 it is nothing but just a waste of
money
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,
This
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 essay will discuss why it is completely important to
support
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this
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 type of artists. On the one hand, some people think that
artist
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 like painters, musician and poet should not be supported by
government
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. They have reason to believe that, providing fun for
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artist
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 is the waste of
money
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,
instead
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 of doing hard work to grow stronger
this
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artist
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 are wasting their
money
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 on alcohol.
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, one of my friends who is a singer and whenever he got aid from the authorities he went to the nearest bar and drinks the alcohol by that
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. Because of
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 reason, people disagree with the statement that to
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 artists.
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, people who are in favour of that the
government
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 should provide help to the
artist
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 to build their career. They believe that some artists are poor and they don't have anything to feed their family. They just have their talent and in that case people believe that
government
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 should provide financial
support
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 for these types of artists.
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, my neighbour uncle is a great painter, but he is poor and if they get the help of
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then
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 he could show their talent and can earn some
money
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 to teach their children. It is the reason that makes some people believe that
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artist
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art
 should be helped by the
government
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. In conclusion, whether artists should be supported by
government
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 is becoming debatable. Some people who think that if
artist
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 are Supported by
government
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 could make us proud, while others disagree. In my opinion,
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government
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the government
 should assist the
artist
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 who is poor and needy and in that way the
money
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 won't be wasted.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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