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Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to. How true is this statement? What can tourists do to reduce the harmful effects of tourism on local cultures and environments?

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One of the primary reasons that tourism has
negative impact
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a negative impact
 in its country is overcrowded
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 In peak season
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 you can easily witness the tourists stand full of
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the pagoda
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 beach or they are hustling each other in order to get the gate ticket earlier
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 With swelling visitor come to the area, the local government
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can not
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 control their activities correctly lead to unexpected spectacles.
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 one of the biggest problems caused by overcrowding. Travellers and local people have to spend many hours waiting to get to their destination
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 Because of those things
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 not only urban beauty
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 culture heritages is significantly affected. Another point worth noting is the bad influence of tourism on the ecosystems
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 More and more land is destroyed for new resorts
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 hotels and
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 destination due to the need for accommodation
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 Numerous animals are under threat because of losing their home or being killed to make souvenir for
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tourist
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tourists
the tourist
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 As the
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 industry grows
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 an enormous pressure is put on the
enviroment
the totality of surrounding conditions
environment
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a great amount of gas come from transport can raise levels of carbon dioxide lead to pollution. Generally
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 I think there are positive things that
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tourists
a tourist
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 the local government should take action to control the quantity of visitor come to the place and upgrade the public transport to encourage people using
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 of personal vehicle
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 another way of solving
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 introducing the regulation of the place to every visitor
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 warning site about how to reduce and reuse rubric should be place throughout to raise awareness for
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