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Most people pay taxes to contribute to the development of their country, however, some think they have other responsibilities rather than paying taxes. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In most of the countries, the
government
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 operates with revenue collected through the tax. A few people believe that they are only obliged to remit the taxes.
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, others opine that they must involve in other social reforming activities to support their society. In my opinion, obeying the rules and regulations of the
country
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 is as important as paying taxes. On the one hand, except the oil-rich countries, most of the other countries run their
government
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 with revenue generated through taxes. All
government
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 policies, projects, subsidies, and schemes are funded by the money raised through tax. Even the salary of
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 servants is paid using these funds.
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, it is clear that every citizen of a
country
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 must pay taxes.
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, In a
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, there are certain rules and regulations that every citizen must abide. If people are arrogant and fail to obey the laws, it is difficult to maintain peace and tranquility in the
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.
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, it results in economic depression and may lead the
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 to civil war.
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, the Syrian
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 had enough revenue from oil reserves, but people had an aggressive attitude to other
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 dwellers. People failed to follow the legal system and lead to civil war.
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, the economy depressed and people are forced to move out of the
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 for asylum.
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, people can offer voluntary services in the underdeveloped regions of the
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.
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, educational workshops and health camps can be organized in the remote location of the
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 through which they can support the
government
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. Better education and health care system is the tool to eradicate poverty. To conclude, every citizen of the
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 is obliged to pay taxes.
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, abiding the rules and regulations of the
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 is as important as paying taxes.

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