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Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to. How true is this statement? What can tourists do to reduce the harmful effects of tourism on local cultures and environments

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We
can not
can not
cannot
 deny that
tourism
 plays a main role in the income and development of many
place
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places
 in the world.
However
,
tourism
 can
also
 be a source of problems, especially if it is not managed well.One of the primary reasons that
tourism
 has a negative impact in its country is
overcrowding
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overcrowded
.
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.
 In peak season, you can easily witness the tourists are hustling each other in pagodas
,
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,
 hot spot or beach because there is no more free space for them to stand. With swelling visitor come to the area every year, the local government
can not
can not
cannot
 control their activities correctly which lead to some unexpected spectacles.
Besides
, the traffic jam is
also
 one of the biggest problems caused by overcrowding. Travellers and local people have to spend many hours waiting to get to their destination.Because of those things
,
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,
 not only urban beauty, but
also culture is
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culture is also
 significantly affected. Another point worth noting is the bad influence of
tourism
 on the ecosystems. More and more lands are due to the need for accommodation
.
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.
Numerous animals are under threat owing to losing their home or being killed to make souvenir for
tourist
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tourists
the tourist
. As the tourist industry grows, an enormous pressure is put on the environment. Undoubtedly
,
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,
a great amount of gas come from transport can raise levels of carbon dioxide lead to pollution. Generally
,
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,
 I think there are positive things that
tourist
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tourists
a tourist
 can do.
First
,
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,
the local government should take action in order to control the quantity of visitor coming to the
place
 and upgrade the public transport to encourage people using
instead
 of personal vehicle. Another way of solving
this
 issue would be enacting strict legislation to stop exploiting land as well as protecting the animals. Introducing the regulation of the
place
 to every visitor is needed
.
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.
Furthermore
, warning site should be
place
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placed
 throughout to remind visitor’s
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
.
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