Our personalities are predetermined as a result of our genes before we are born and there is nothing that can be done to change our character traits. To what extent do you agree?

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Some believe that human characters are expected before the birth on the basis of their genetics and their
character
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cannot be changed under any circumstances. I disagree that our behaviours have the same traits as per our genes and at any circumstances it
cannot be modify
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cannot be modified
.
This
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essay will
firstly
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discuss about how genes develop only the personality of mannerism and appearance and
secondly
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about how the traits is developed based on education and surroundings of the
character
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.
To begin
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with, genes
provides
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provide
only physical characteristics
to
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of
the
offspring but
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offspring, but
not the
character
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of the ancestors. Mostly mannerism
are transferred
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is transferred
from the genes to the new generations and
further
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, they have the similarity in appearance of their old generation.
Moreover
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,
character
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depends on individual
behaviour but
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behaviour, but
not from the genes.
For instance
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, a child can have the left handed with
same height
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the same height
and skin
tone as of
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tone as
their parents.
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, education and surroundings
plays
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play
vital roles in one’s
character
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development. On getting educated, future generations can know the difference between
right and wrong doings
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the right and wrong doings
and
also
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circumstances makes a person to develop a good or bad
character
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.
Further
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, on being raised by steady parents makes the
youngers more
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younger, more
younger more
responsible and good citizens. While, children in
unprivileged
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areas tend to become a juvenile delinquent.
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, kids growing around the crime prone area, will be influenced them to become delinquencies in
future
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the future
. In conclusion, I am of the opinion that genes gives the personality of having only mannerism and physical characteristics but not the
character
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traits whereas education and surroundings changes the individual’s
character
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  • Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • predetermined
  • character traits
  • genetic influence
  • environmental factors
  • personality development
  • upbringing
  • foundation
  • evolution of traits
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