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in the future, nobody will buy printed newspaper or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

The rapid change of technology makes some behaviour on something change. Nowadays many
people
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 are able to read
newspapers
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 or
books
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 online through their smartphones.
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, there is a statement that in the future, not a single person will obtain printed
newspapers
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 or
books
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 because they will able to read everything that they want online without paying. I, remain to disagree with that statement for two reasons. On the one hand, reading a newspaper or
book
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 online actually is not free. Folks must pay for internet data if they want to read anything on the internet, including
newspapers
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 or
books
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.
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, when the public decides to read
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 online, in some cases they must spend some money
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 copyright from the writer.
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, some communities especially
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 of older ages, would hard to pay because some payment methods need a Mastercard number.
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, buying a traditional
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 is still the best choice for them.
On the other hand
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, some folks argue that reading is an activity related to art.
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, they still believe that the activity is only called reading if it uses paper. Not only do they feel closer to the writer when they read printed
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, but
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 the paper itself gives a positive aroma to them. In some situations, they can easily mark the
last
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 page on
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 as there are some mark tools on the
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.
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, when a student reads a sports
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, and she/he must do an exercise immediately, they can use the mark tool on that
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, and continue to read after the gym. In conclusion,
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 the rapid change of technology nowadays can affect the way
people
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 read
newspapers
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 or
books
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 online, I remain convinced that printed
newspapers
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 or
books
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 will still have a place in
people
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's hearts. Not only reading on the internet actually is not free, but
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 printed
books
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 or
newspapers
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 can make
people
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 closer to the writer.

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task achievement
To strengthen your task response, further development of arguments with more specific examples would be beneficial. Consider including a broader range of perspectives, such as environmental concerns or the impact on the publishing industry.
coherence cohesion
While your essay is generally clear, enhancing the logical structure can improve coherence and cohesion. Pay attention to the flow between sentences and paragraphs to ensure smoother transitions.
task achievement
Adding more detailed explanations to your points will help in making your ideas clearer and more comprehensive.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are well-presented and effectively frame your argument.
task achievement
You offer valid points about the cost of internet data and the tactile experience of reading printed materials that align well with your stance.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technological advancements
  • Digital content
  • Environmental concerns
  • Tactile experience
  • Production costs
  • Distribution costs
  • Digital divide
  • Digital fatigue
  • Print media
  • Credibility
  • Permanence
  • Collectibility
  • Aesthetic value
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