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Some people believe that it is important to give gifts and presents to friends and family to show that we care about them. Others think that there are better ways to show affection to them. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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A fair portion of people believe that to express their care towards their dear ones is to shower them with gifts. While others
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believe in showing
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 them through enhanced way. I believe there are different methods to express ones love and affection to people around us over giving gifts to them.
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 discuss how gifts and presents make their family happy. And
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, through spending
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time
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 and by giving surprises to their family and friends.
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, Love and affection can be expressed by presenting them their lovable or needed things as a
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. Presenting a
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 on the occasion, makes their friends and family realize that how much one is caring about them and they feel happy about it and
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 shows the monetary value
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 presenting costlier gifts to them the
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, Presenting balloon or toys to the children, makes them happier
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, there are different ways to express their love towards their lovable person. One of the
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time
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 with their family and friends on their busy schedule makes their dear ones feel delighted.
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, the other method is by surprising them by cooking their favourite dishes or taking them to their favourite spots. These activities
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make
 them happier more than presenting a
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 to them.
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, spending
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, by chatting with the old people and by assisting them, makes the elders elated To sum up, love and care can be showered to their dear ones through presenting a
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gift
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gift, however
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, spending some
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time
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 with them makes one really happy.
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, I believe in various ways to show their caring to their family and friends than gifting them .
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