the maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

the maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.
The two maps show
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Islip's
plans
for developing its centre in the future
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the biggest change to be about creating a dual carriageway.
Initially
, Islip Center now has
shops
on both sides of the main street
,
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but
plans
to build a shopping centre and
shops
along the northern and southern border of the walkway, respectively. The pedestrian area will be between
shops
and the new developments
such
as a bus station and car park which is very helpful for the community.
According to
the development plan, the city is going to build a bus station on the west side of the Shopping Centre and a car park on its east side.
Moreover
, a new housing development there are in the
plans
, on the southern border of the
shops
next
to the park and on the east side of the parking.
Overall
, to complete the
plans
they have to build in the countryside. All these developments will be within the dual carriageway which is very useful for the town to have all these close and with easy access.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words plans, shops with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Small town
  • Centre
  • Development
  • Maps
  • Plans
  • Introduce
  • Topic
  • Purpose
  • Essay
  • Description
  • Current
  • Key features
  • Facilities
  • Advantages
  • Positive aspects
  • Benefits
  • Proposed
  • Changes
  • Improvements
  • Suggested
  • Potential
  • Course of action
  • Summarize
  • Opinion
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