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the education system is only critical factor in the development of a country. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#education #system #factor #development #country
Large
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The largest
 number of nations are dependent on the process they follow in order to raise themselves better. According to me, the most imperative pillar on which any country stands is their
ecducational
relating to the process of education
educational
 structure.
Although
, there
being
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is
are
 many factors behind
growth
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growth, however
however
 none of the factors can be compared to the factor of
knowledgement
the state or quality of being recognized or acknowledged
acknowledgement
. Evidently one can refer to the line that
knowledge
 is the key go
sucess
an event that accomplishes its intended purpose
success
. I believe that, the skills one gets from being well educated can not
perseved
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perceive
perceived
 from
any where
at or in or to any place
anywhere
 else. Study at each level and age teaches many things. The development here is not limited to
knowledge but
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knowledge, but
 it extends to behaviour as well. To personify as a well mannered individual the
education
 set up should be proper. I strongly feel that a factor that can make someone can
also
 become a reason of destruction. In the event the formation of
education
 is not
defined well
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defined, well
 there are chances where people can be
misleaded
lead someone in the wrong direction or give someone wrong directions
misled
mislead
. It is very essential to say that not only half
knowledge but
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knowledge, but
also
 improper
knowledge
 is dangerous. The same be explicitly seen in the
under developed
relating to societies in which capital needed to industrialize is in short supply
underdeveloped
 or developing nation where their defeat is because of no proper
education
 system.
Hence
, I opine that for a country to develop better and grow with large pace require an organised
education
 for all. A
knowledgable
highly educated; having extensive information or understanding
knowledgeable
 community will always have high skills up
ot
in the direction of
to
at
 mark the growth and development.

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