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The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph below provides the number of
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deliveries and passing
rates
 in
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 Zealand population since 1901, and prognosticates trends up until 2101.
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, it was obvious from the graph that
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mortality has risen steadily in the period shown
while
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mutuality was on
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fluctuation in the beginning 50 years and hit the highest position in 1961, which
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 the death
rates
 will probably overtake the parturition
rates
 by the end of the previously mentioned century. To be more specific, it can be seen that in 1901, the childbearing rate started at 20.000 and
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fluctuation for about ten years before there was a sudden rather sharp decline in 1921. Thenceforth, the birth rate fluctuated significantly until it reached a peak of 66.000 in 1961 and stayed between 65 and 50 thousand. The birth rate is predicted to decrease slowly to around 45.000 births by the end of 2101. Compared to the fatality
rates
, it stood at below 10.000 deaths in 1901 and continuously improved gradually until
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 day. There will be a rapid recovery in the death
rates
 between 2021 and 2061. Predictably, the death
rates
 are likely to peak at 60.000 by 2090, before falling back to around 56,000
at the end
 of the period.

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