Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Music
is one of our life aspects that we found it the most interest.
Moreover
, it is well known that
music
is a buoyant measure of taking people from different cultures and ages together. I have strongly advocated that I have a same view with regard to the statement that say
music
is a good step to bring myriad citizens from different group.
To begin
with,
music
Suggestion
the music
has manifold genres that's always connected to each other,
for example
; Jazz and Pop, R&B and EDM.
In addition
, the young generation is more likely to keep in touch with Rock, R&B, and EDM genre.
On the other hand
, the older generation has more tendency to listen to Jazz, Blues, and Pop genre. The nowadays
music
industry has already improved a lot since the beginning of the 21st century.
Therefore
, myriad kinds of
music
genre can be mixed into one
song
, and numerous of different generations can gather up and listen to
this
kind of
song
together,
for instance
; Lemon by Kenshi Yonezu.
This
song
is about Kenshi’s grandfather that had already passed away, the lyrics itself have a plethora of deep meaning and contain many lyrics that related to love.
Consequently
, an array of people finds
this
song suit
Suggestion
song to suit
perfectly with their taste. The
next
,
music
has a multitude beneficial thing for our body,
for example
; it can reduce our stress after working or even studying for almost 12 hours.
Moreover
, when we have a reunion event or even a party,
music
will be our
first
priority to be included in
such event because
Suggestion
such an event because
it can make us feel relaxed and make our relationship stronger than before. In a nutshell,
music
can bring people from different groups, so that they can become stronger.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

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Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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