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Scientists believe that computer become more intelligent than human . Some people believe that it is a positive development ,other think that is a negative development .discuss both view and give your opinion .

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Technology plays a major role is in modern lifestyle, but it has some
drawbackAnd
 one of them is smart
computer
 some people believe
that is
 s the positive in fact
on
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in
 our society whereas, others believe that it have a more negative effect.
This
 essay will highlight that the negative of
this
 approach surpass the positive of
this
 approach. There are myriad things to be shared with the
first
 statement
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First
 and foremost
,
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 it
is create
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is creating
is created
has created
creates
 unemployment
.
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 Many a company replaces their staff with the computers.
For example
, many information technology companies will relays on
computer
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the computer
a computer
computers
 because it will do work without rest and salaries.
Besides
this
,
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,
 many classes are replaced by a smart class. Smart computers Repeat one module more than
hundred times
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a hundred times
, but it cannot customise the module according to the student level so it will create bigger issues on students academics
.
Accept space
.
 I would like to add some points in order to bolster my opinion
.
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.
 Smart
computer
also increase
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also increases
 a cyber crime
such
 as online fraud.
On the other hand
,
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,
 it is beneficial in some cases. Smart
computer
are used
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is used
 for Outer space monitoring
.
Accept space
.
For instance
, many outer space research companies use
computer
 for monitoring on the moon. In conclusion
,
Accept space
,
 it can be said that technology Technology has mix outcome
.
Accept space
.
However
, I believe that negative of smart
computer
 surpassed positive of
this
.
Accept space
.
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