Nowadays a large amount of advertising aiming at children should be banned because of the negative effects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Today
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children
become
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have become
commercial target
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the commercial target
of many advertisers and many people believe that activity of advertisers should be banned because it harm children
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Personally
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I agree with
this
idea due to some reasons
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First
of all
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many advertisements were created and exaggerated by advertisers
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Its make children who
is
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are
naive and inexperienced have
a
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an
illusion about products
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Furthermore
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children will try to persuade their parents to buy these
products
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products, although
although
these products aren’t as good as they think and it’s
waste
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a waste
of money
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For example
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exaggeration of products
make
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makes
people believe that these products are very good as well as
price
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the price
of these products increase extremely
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As a result
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people spend too much money to buy them
although
they aren’t worthwhile
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However
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choosing children as
target market
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a target market
of advertisers has brought some benefit and useful information
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It
help
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helps
parents of children can choose products which are suitable for their children
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In addition
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people can distinguish between real and fake products
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For instance
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they can avoid
negative effects
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the negative effects
of fake products thank to useful information advertisements provide
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In conclusi
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, many people think that choosing children a
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the target market
et is more harm than good and I totally agree with their opinions
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