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The government should ban smoking in public places , even though this would restrict some other people's freedom . Do you agree or disagree.

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Smoking is injurious to health. It can even cause deadly diseases like
cancer
. Many countries have already banned smoking in public places. In my opinion, others too should follow suit and
ban
 it. There are several benefits
to
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of
 banning smoking in public places.
Smoking
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The smoking ban
ban
 will definitely improve the quality of air we breathe. Cigarette contains
nicotine which
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nicotine, which
 is a cancerous substance.
In addition
 to
cancer
, smoking causes several other health problems. In fact, statistics have shown
tremendous rise
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a tremendous rise
 in the occurrence of mouth
cancer
 among people who smoke regularly. Some studies have
also
 shown that people who smoke more than 3 cigarettes a day have increased chances of developing
cancer
. Smoking may
also
 cause other problems like heart attack and respiratory illnesses. The biggest problem with smoking is that in order to suffer from its ill effects, you don’t necessarily have to be a smoker. Passive smoking
also
 kills. It is particularly harmful
for
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to
 young children and pregnant women. If people are allowed to smoke in crowded public places like railway stations or bus stands, its harmful effects will have to be borne by all people standing
next
 to the smoker. Banning smoking in public places is the only way to solve
this
 problem. Pollution is one of the biggest problems that we face today. Smoking not only aggravates
this
problem but
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problem, but
 it
also
 causes the depletion of the ozone layer which protects us from
sun’s harmful ultraviolet rays
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the sun’s harmful ultraviolet rays
. It is evident that smoking plays a significant role in damaging our health and our environment. In conclusion, I personally believe that all governments should
ban
 smoking in public places.
This
 might cause some inconvenience to chain smokers, but ultimately
this
ban
 will benefit them as well.
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