It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? what sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to childen?

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It is valuable for a

child

to understand

betwee

internal to, involving members of (a group of people)

between

whats

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what's

right and

whats

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what's

wrong at an early age. Many believe

punishment

is required for

this

understanding. I strongly disagree

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with

the statement that

punishment

is required to teach a

child

about the rights and wrongs. In today's society, knowing

whats

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what's

right and

whats

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what's

wrong is a

curcial

of extreme importance; vital to the resolution of a crisis

crucial

part of ones up bringing.

However using

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However, using

punishment

to facilitate

this

is not

advisable espcially

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advisable, especially

advisable especially

physical form of

punishment

. A youngsters early life should be free from

phsycial

involving the body as distinguished from the mind or spirit

physical

punishment

as it causes emotional and physical stress to the

child

addition a

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addition, a

child

will lose trust towards parents and teachers if they go through pain.

Furthermore they

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Furthermore, they

will try and hide rather than admit their wrongdoings. Parents, teachers and guardians should disciple children in

varous

of many different kinds purposefully arranged but lacking any uniformity

various

ways. One of which is negative reinforcement. A parent can remove items

such

as toys, chocolate or mobile as a form of

punishment

Furthermore communication

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Furthermore, communication

with the

child

that they have done something wrong is is more effective than physical

punishment

. Through these forms a

child

will

also

develop trust and ability to admit wrongs

with

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others. In conclusion, I

strong

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strongly

disagree that

punishment

is required for a

child

to understand good behaviour. Communication and negative reinforcement can be used to instil righteous behaviour in a

child

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