It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? what sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to childen?

It is valuable for a
child
to understand
betwee
internal to, involving members of (a group of people)
between
whats
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what's
right and
whats
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what's
wrong at an early age. Many believe
punishment
is required for
this
understanding. I strongly disagree
to
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with
the statement that
punishment
is required to teach a
child
about the rights and wrongs. In today's society, knowing
whats
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what's
right and
whats
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what's
wrong is a
curcial
of extreme importance; vital to the resolution of a crisis
crucial
part of ones up bringing.
However using
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However, using
punishment
to facilitate
this
is not
advisable espcially
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advisable, especially
advisable especially
physical form of
punishment
. A youngsters early life should be free from
phsycial
involving the body as distinguished from the mind or spirit
physical
punishment
as it causes emotional and physical stress to the
child
.
In
addition a
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addition, a
child
will lose trust towards parents and teachers if they go through pain.
Furthermore they
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Furthermore, they
will try and hide rather than admit their wrongdoings. Parents, teachers and guardians should disciple children in
varous
of many different kinds purposefully arranged but lacking any uniformity
various
ways. One of which is negative reinforcement. A parent can remove items
such
as toys, chocolate or mobile as a form of
punishment
.
Furthermore communication
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Furthermore, communication
with the
child
that they have done something wrong is is more effective than physical
punishment
. Through these forms a
child
will
also
develop trust and ability to admit wrongs
with
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to
others. In conclusion, I
strong
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strongly
disagree that
punishment
is required for a
child
to understand good behaviour. Communication and negative reinforcement can be used to instil righteous behaviour in a
child
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