Some people believe that to be successful at a sport you need a natural ability and others think that hard work and practice can make you successful. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

Few
millenials
a person whose material wealth is valued at more than a million dollars
millionaires
believe that sports
is
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are
a natural form of art
.
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.
whereas
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Whereas
, some of them do not agree with
this
fact as passion and zeal
towrds
near
towards
toward
any kind of activity will get them to places. In my opinion
,
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,
I agree that
one
's ability to work hard towards their
dream
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dreams
will
definetly
without question and beyond doubt
definitely
pay them off. Sports is a natural form of art for those who are gifted with scholastic genes
.
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.
Individuals who play sports are considered to have
good physique
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a good physique
and stamina
,
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,
not many are fortunate enough to be an offspring of an
athelete
a person trained to compete in sports
athlete
athletes
who would not only have the built but are
also
lucky enough to afford expensive sports training.
For instance
, international player
such
as Roger
Federer who
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Federer, who
has won
significant number
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a significant number
significant numbers
of grand slams lately, had twins who and are already
upront
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up-front
upfront
and are playing tennis at a very small age and
one
day surely win a title just like their father.
on
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On
the flip side, people who are passionate about sports and have put efforts to do what they like will
definetly
without question and beyond doubt
definitely
pass with flying colours
.
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.
Yes,
this
is not
genetics but
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genetics, but
their thriving interest in something they love
,
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,
this
will not only make them attain success for what they have to put in but
also
give them satisfaction at the end of the day.
For example
, Sachin
Tendulkar who
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Tendulkar, who
was after all no
one
at the age of 12 eventually became world-famous because of his hard work as well as his zeal towards cricket. In conclusion,
one
has to put in their own efforts to become successful and should not be discouraged at the very
begining
the event consisting of the start of something
beginning
as everything in life comes with
hardwork
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hard work
and passion
.
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.

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