Write about the following topic. Traditions are about the past and innovation is about the future, and it has been argued that we need to let go of traditions for the sake of progress. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this? What role should traditions have in our lives? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
With the speed of the developed world, some people think that we should get rid of
traditions
for future
development. From my perspective, I do not completely agree with this
statement, I think we just need to let of some things that are not useful due to
traditions
still and forever having an important role in our life such
as the significance of culture in each nation. In this
essay, I will discuss it clearly and give my own knowledge.
To begin
with, there is one main reason that we should conserve our traditions
. The first and foremost is the value of culture, which is nowadays gradually faded away. As a
fact, Change preposition
A
traditions
, and cultures are always two things to indicate our value in each person in a country
, which are passed from former generations to future
ones like the loyalty to country
, freedom, language, and memories of the heroes who contributed to build up our country
in the past. As a result
, if we lose our own traditional traits
like these, then
anytime in the future
, we will be absorbed by others, which may be not suitable for us, for example
, in the Vietnam War, we were under the loss of freedom for over 1000 years by the northern empires, but with the strength of cultural and traditional traits
, our people did not give up, still standing up to get back our libration. So, it is unbelievable that we are willing to give up all the beautiful traditional traits
that we have inherited from former generations.
However
, there are still some traditions
that may be not appropriate for the present such
as the discrimination for women
in the old society where women
were not allowed to go to study or have a high position in government, and in the past, only boys were loved more than girls for some unfair reasons. As a consequence
, these bad traditions
will have bad effects if they are continued as they will lead to the unbalance of proportion between men and women
, or the not perfect contribution to the development of society. Hence
, those traits
need to be eliminated from the future
.
In conclusion, there are many significant characteristics in our traditions
and cultures that we need to preserve for the sustainability of our country
. But those bad traits
such
as discrimination for women
should be erased from our society.Submitted by nguyenhuyhoa1506 on
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Task Achievement
Your essay provides a balanced view on the topic, making clear arguments for the importance of preserving traditions while acknowledging the need to let go of those that hinder progress. To enhance your task response, consider adding more precise examples that directly tie to the argument for an even stronger position.
Coherence & Cohesion
You've done well to structure your essay into clear paragraphs with an introduction, body, and conclusion. To improve coherence, consider linking your ideas more explicitly, using phrases like 'Furthermore,' 'In addition to,' or 'However,' to guide the reader through your argument more smoothly.
Coherence & Cohesion
While your main points are supported, developing your examples with more detail could strengthen your argument. For instance, when discussing the value of culture and traditions, provide specific, tangible examples of how these have positively impacted societies or individuals.
Content
Articulated a balanced perspective on preserving traditions while also recognizing the necessity for change.
Structure
Effective organization into clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.