Nowadays children are consuming too many suger based drinks . What are the reasons and solutions of the problem

The
sugar
based drinks that are being consumed by children are too much these days. The prime reason for
this
is parents these days are very
lineant
tolerant or lenient
lenient
and
dont
do not
don't
restrict
thier
of them or themselves
their
children from having
such
liquids becasue
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liquids, because
liquids because
not many of them are aware of the negative impact it can have on them. The amount of
carbodhydrates
an essential structural component of living cells and source of energy for animals; includes simple sugars with small molecules as well as macromolecular substances; are classified according to the number of monosaccharide groups they contain
carbohydrates
carbohydrate
that the
sugar
has are
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is
has been
is being
was
pretty high and not many are aware of
this
fact
.
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.
The
sugar
also
contains some chemicals as it is not obtained directly in the form whatever it is edible as but it undergoes
serveral
(used with count nouns) of an indefinite number more than 2 or 3 but not many
several
manufacturing process before they actually take form.Not many people know that
jaggery
can be
a
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an
excellent replacement for
sugar
and it is much healthier.So
instead
of adding
sugar
to drinks whatever children consume it is better to use
jaggery
as it is by far healthier to consume than
sugar
. Children are usually fond of sweets rather than spicy items in turn which might be another reason why they prefer much of
sugar
based drinks. There are plenty of alternatives like
sugarcane
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sugar cane
juice and
also
jaggery
can be used as a direct replacement for
sugar
based drinks. It adds to the overall healthy development of children. Another reason for why children
prefer these
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prefer, these
are the weather conditions because usually they might not like to have a tomato or carrot
juice which
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juice, which
is tasteless and rather they would prefer
sugar
based liquids
anyday
.
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.
So it is important for a parent to take care and make it a habit to his or her children to get used to
jaggery
based drinks rather than
sugar
based as it serves both taste and the
overaal
involving only main features
overall
l development of a child

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