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As countries have developed there has been a trend towards smaller family sizes. Why does this happen? How does this affect society?

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In recent years, it has become more normal for people to select to reside in small families, particularly in the developed world. There are various reasons for
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 exert a lot of effects on society One of the principal reasons for smaller family units is the development of the countries in which depend on their workforce. For
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 reason, manifold women are more likely to work outside
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 of staying at home and doing the household chores. Both parents often work results in limit time in child care.
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, it costs so much to bring children up, especially in developed areas.
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, in Hong Kong, the cost of study from primary to undergraduate school is much in excess of comparing to other countries, even in European countries.
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, the tuition fee is affordable for manifold people, especially for people who are on the average salary.
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 issue can impact on society in a number of ways. In positive manners, a long-term decline in birth rates has a positive influence on the labour market due a decreasing number of job applicants. From depopulation the competition for resources within the population is reduced.
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, the life quality increases by virtue of lower motorised traffic, less environmental destruction, reduced carbon and nitrogen emissions, reduced pollution, reforestation.
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, one adverse ramification is that there will be fewer young people in the workforce in the future.
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, the sustainability of future economic growth less certain. In conclusion, the trend of reduction of family size is certain to arise and exert both positive and negative impacts on society by dint of the high cost of bringing children up and the growth of economic.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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