In today’s competitive world, many families find it necessary for both parents go out to work. While some say the children in these families benefit from the additional income, others feel they lack support because of their parents’ absence.

In
this
modern world, Every person
have
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has
to do work
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worked
hard for fulfilling their wish and becoming financially stronger.In many
families
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families, both
both
the parents work for their prospectives. Some individual opine that because of
this
reason children
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reason, children
feel alone.
This
essay will
discusses
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discuss
the arguments of
both
ends.
To begin
with, by belonging to the working
family children
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family, children
have
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has
some benefits.
Firstly
, when
both
the parents work they can
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
their children’s needs.
Secondly
, if the parents financial condition is stronger than they
provid
give something useful or necessary to
provide
proved
provided
better education to their children by putting them best schools.
For
example today
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example, today
private
school
has a more facilities than government
school but
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school, but
their
fees
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fee
charge is too expensive
,
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,
everyone can not afford it. But when their parents have enough money than they can put them in
good
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a good school
good schools
school
.
Howeve
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However
,
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,
others feel that when
both
parents are working
,
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,
children
has
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have
no one to take care of them
,
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,
children feel less supportive. Children want to tell lots of things to their parents
such
as what they do in
school
, how the children feel many other things that children want to tell their guardian, but they
can not
can not
cannot
share it because of
both
the parents are working.
Furthermore
, Children often feel depressed because
their
in or at that place
there
is no one to
listen
perceive (sound) via the auditory sense
hear
them. Sometime
child
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a child
take
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takes
unsuitable decisions while they are sad. Their parents
has
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have
have had
no time to listen them working becomes
first
priority for them.  To conclude, working is a good thing because of employment parents fulfil their Childens
wishes but
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wishes, but
sometimes it will
effect
have an effect upon
affect
children’s mind
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a child’s mind
child’s mind
when
both
parents are working.
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