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Scientific research should be carried out and controlled by the governments rather than private companies. Do you agree or disagree?

#research #governments #companies
The line chart illustrates the number of births and deaths in New Zealand since 1901 and makes a prediction until 2101 at intervals of twenty years. It is clear that there was a gradual rise in the death rates over two centuries, while the birth rates only increased in the
first
 50 years.
Additionally
, the
natality
the quality or state of being mortal
mortality
neutrality
 has experienced the most considerable change over the period given. As can be seen from the chart, in 1901, the number of births
was
Suggestion
has been
 just over 10 000s, whereas that of
deaths
Suggestion
death
 was double. For the
next
 century, the birth rate showed many fluctuations and reached its peak at around 66 000s in the year 1961. Since
then
,
this
 rate stood between 50 000s and 60 000s until 2001.
In contrast
, there was a slow one-hundred-year rise with no decline in the rates of deaths. According to the prediction, from 2001, the birth rates will see a slight drop and fall to about 42 000s in 2101. Meanwhile, the death number is estimated to go up dramatically before reaching a plateau (at around 58 000s) in 2051.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • scientific research
  • carried out
  • controlled
  • governments
  • private companies
  • unbiased
  • prioritize
  • profit
  • public interest
  • allocate resources
  • lucrative
  • collaboration
  • information sharing
  • confidential
  • competitive advantage
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