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peoples's lives are now surrounded by advertisements. These advertisements have negative impact on people's lives.To what extend you agree or disagree?

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With the advancements in technology ranging from printing press to radio, to television, and most recently the internet, have revolutionized and alter the way people acknowledge new concepts, products, companies and brands. I agree to the fact that, buying the advertisements blindly could be proved crucial and to a certain extend detrimental. Nowadays we will not get to watch a sporting event without seeing an advertisement taunting a treatment for diabetes, high cholesterol or joint pains. Going for these medications without consulting a doctor can be proved to be hazardous. In spite of all its adversities, advertisements are an integral part of society to keep the people informed,
however
, reminded of a product or service or the benefits it will provide when they purchase promptly.
For example
, let us consider the context of prescription drugs advertisements. We should rather approach these commercials as a resource for information than as an answer to the questions about treatment. Usually we observe advertisements as an obnoxious way for companies to invade our everyday lives and ram their products down our throats.
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es of effective advertising strategies to remonstrate on social as well as environmental issues
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 as female feoticide, air and water pollut
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the act of destroying a fetus
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lobal warming. It can be concluded that commercials can be considered innocuous if presumed sensibly,
furthermore
 advertisements justifies its existence when used in the public interest.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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