As a country develops, people tend to buy more cars. Do the advantages for the individual outweigh the disadvantages for the environment.

It has been observed in recent years that private
vehicule
a conveyance that transports people or objects
vehicle
vehicles
use in increasing.
Hence
, some people believe that
owening
belonging to or on behalf of a specified person (especially yourself); preceded by a possessive
owning
a car is a vital
elemnt
an abstract part of something
element
elements
of their life in order to commute fast and comfortable,
whiliste
Suggestion
whilst
others believe that
this
may
results
Suggestion
result
in severe
environment
Suggestion
environmental
prblems
a state of difficulty that needs to be resolved
problems
. In my opinion, I believe that it is essential to encourage people not to buy more cars in order to reduce many problems
such
as pollution.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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