Some say you should always marry for love; others say that in an uncertain world it's wiser to marry for money. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion.

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important decision in everyone

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the content of cognition; the main thing you are thinking about

thought

by some

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the main reason behind

marriage

should

love

, others think that contemporary world

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this

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the act of making up your mind about something

decision

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should based on

money

. In my opinion

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for successful

marriage both

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marriage, both

love

and

money

are important factors to consider

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the (prehensile) extremity of the superior limb

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some people believe that getting

marry

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married

to another person depends upon

love

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the love

between

couple

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the couple

couples

a couple

.The

first

argument in favour of

love

is that its role is crucial in making a

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harmonious

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in addition

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love

fosters affection

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warmth and sense of belongingness.

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love

is the power which

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keeps

two souls together

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regardless of their status symbol and

nationalties

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national ties

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have a great affection or liking for

Love

feeds

souls

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the souls

of humans by creating a feeling of care for each other. According to

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group of people, If there is not a symbiotic relation between couples,

money

will be useless.

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the other hand

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other

any of various alternatives; some other

another

thinks that for

successfull

having succeeded or being marked by a favorable outcome

successful

marriage

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money

is a crucial

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Firstly

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money

is needed

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put in effect

fulfil

all

responsibilties

the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force

responsibilities

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such

as shelter

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food and clothing and accomplishment of these needs leads to

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a happy family

happy families

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Money

feeds human worldly needs which provide them a status symbol in the contemporary society.

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a complex interplay

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hence

(used to introduce a logical conclusion) from that fact or reason or as a result

Hence

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and

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both are indispensable part of

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love

is required to maintain harmony between relations.

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Some say you should always marry for love; others say that in an uncertain world it's wiser to marry for money. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

In many countries today, crime novels and TV crime dramas are becoming more and more popular. Why do you think these books and TV shows are popular? What is your opinion of crime fiction and TV crime dramas?

Many offenders commit more crimes after serving the punishment. Why are this happening, and what measures can be taken to tackle this problem?

Many people are optimistic about the 21st century and expect scientists to make positive changes to the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with their optimism? What changes do you like to see in your new century?

Nowadays, people have little awareness of the importance of the natural world. What are the reasons and how can people learn more about the natural world?

In many countries, the traditional customs are being lost. What you think why this happens? What schools and parents need to do to keep the traditional customs alive?