Some say you should always marry for love; others say that in an uncertain world it's wiser to marry for money. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion.

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the content of cognition; the main thing you are thinking about

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the act of making up your mind about something

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some people believe that getting

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married

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love

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the love

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the couple

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argument in favour of

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is that its role is crucial in making a

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bond between two strangers.

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moreover

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love

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fosters affection

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warmth and sense of belongingness.

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love

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is the power which

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keeps

two souls together

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regardless of their status symbol and

nationalties

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national ties

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love

have a great affection or liking for

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feeds

souls

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the souls

of humans by creating a feeling of care for each other. According to

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group of people, If there is not a symbiotic relation between couples,

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will be useless.

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the other hand

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other

any of various alternatives; some other

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having succeeded or being marked by a favorable outcome

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money

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is a crucial

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is needed

fulfill

put in effect

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responsibilties

the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force

responsibilities

which usually increase after

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such

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as shelter

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food and clothing and accomplishment of these needs leads to

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a happy family

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feeds human worldly needs which provide them a status symbol in the contemporary society.

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my opinion

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refers to the speaker or writer

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a complex interplay

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hence

(used to introduce a logical conclusion) from that fact or reason or as a result

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and

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both are indispensable part of

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a happy life

and inextricably linked to each other.

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important

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is a daunting task. Both

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in contact with each other or in proximity

together

plays a

suppliment

functioning in a supporting capacity

supplemental

role. In conclusion, despite different people have different views,

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think,

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and

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both play a crucial role in making a happy family because

money

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is required to meet the basic needs while

love

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is required to maintain harmony between relations.

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Some say you should always marry for love; others say that in an uncertain world it's wiser to marry for money. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Many people choose to travel abroad to learn a foreign language instead of studying in their home town . What are the advantages and disadvantages of this ?

Some cities create housing areas by providing taller buildings. Others create housing by building houses on a wider area of land. What solution is better?

Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages.If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and if so, how?

In some countries, an increasing number of children are overweight or obese as a result of eating too much fast food. Banning fast food from school canteens is the best way to fight this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people believe that teenagers should study all school subjects. Others argue that they should focus on only the subjects that they are good at or find most interesting. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.