Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It
is certainly true that parents and teachers
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play
a crucial
role
in
development
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the development
of children.
Although
it is thought by some that parents ought to guide their children how to behave in society in an acceptable manner
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others
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hold
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an
opinino
a personal belief or judgment that is not founded on proof or certainty
opinion
school
is responsible for teaching social values.In my opinion
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,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
believe
role
of both is important to teach them. On the one hand, some people believe that parents
role
is imperative in
development
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the development
of children as a responsible citizen due to
following factors
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the following factors
.
Firstly
, parents are
first
chidcare
a service involving care for other people's children
childcare
provider and nobody knows
children temprament
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children, temperament
children temperament
children's temprament
children's children's temprament
better than parents. They can provide critical feedback anytime.
Secondy
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Secondly
Second
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,
they are responsible for building character traits and intellectual behaviour by telling them
importance
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the importance
of
reletoionships
a relation between people; ('relationship' is often used where 'relation' would serve, as in 'the relationship between inflation and unemployment', but the preferred usage of 'relationship' is for human relations or states of relatedness)
relationships
relationship
and others independence in our social
envoirnment
the totality of surrounding conditions
environment
. It is
clear
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clearly
seen that children spend more time with parents are more sensible in social issues.
Therefore
, parents are more
responsibile
worthy of or requiring responsibility or trust; or held accountable
responsible
in
child progress
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a child's progress
child's progress
the child's progress
on
social level
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a social level
the social level
.
On the other hand
,
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
thinks that schooling is responsible because students spend major part of their time in
school
.It is noted that schools are very
successfull
having succeeded or being marked by a favorable outcome
successful
in teaching a child about cooperation which are major virtue of life for sustaining in a society as a good citizen.
For example
, in
school during
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school, during
team work they learn how to cooperate with others members of
team
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the team
a team
and
this
automatically comes in their personality.
Secondly
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Teachers are
scholors
a learned person (especially in the humanities); someone who by long study has gained mastery in one or more disciplines
scholars
in
ther
of them or themselves
their
there
the
actions and real model for pupils.
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That's
why, they listen to their teacher very carefully and try to implement their sayings.It is clear
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evidence
that
teacher's roles
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the teacher's roles
in
children
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child
child's
children's
development
is
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are
paramount. In my opinion,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
believe that child
development
as a social being is a complex interplay of many factors which are inextricably linked to each others.Teachers and
parents
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parents'
role
in developing mature social human
are
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is
equally important. With the efforts of
school
and teachers a fully socially acceptable human can be created. In
concluson
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
conclusions
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while different people have their own view
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,
however
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
believe that whether selecting teacher or parents is a daunting task because
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one
one's
role
cannot be underestimated in comparison to
counterpart
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the counterpart
.
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Hence
, both
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play
supplemental
role
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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