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International tourism has become a huge industry in world. Do the problems of international travel out weight its advantages

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There are different industries around the map, tourism is one of them.
This
 sector has become a gigantic and leading position around the globe and for some countries it is the backbone of their economy. It has both pros and cons. From my point of view, the advantages have outweighed its disadvantages. It’s true that, tourism contributes directly and indirectly to the region. It provides job opportunities to the local people like weight carriers and tour guides which pay them with high
salary
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salary, for
for instance
, in my home town most of the illiterate people are working as guiders for tourists and earn heavy wage.
Secondly
, the tourists
also needs
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also need
 a transport so the government
also provide
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also provides
 them with different vehicles and charge them with faces. More, travellers pay
high pay
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the high pay
 to embassies for granting visa and after that they are
also
 charged for the plane including taxes
such
 money directly come
to
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into
 the treasury.
Thirdly
, the legislators
also
 make the proper road system and different infrastructure like bars, hotels and shops that tourists should feel comfortable with
this
 the local people as get benefits and they can have handy access to different routes.
On the other hand
, theses tourists can harm the environment of a country. They can pollute the water by throwing the waste here and there on the land or they might throw it into the sea.
Secondly
, the crime rate can get an increase. The tourists as an easy prey for their visible wealth like cameras and bags which can be sold easily. In conclusion, international tourism has pros and cons, but the advantages have outweighed the disadvantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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