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Some people think that government should tax unhealthy food to encourage people to begin to eat more healthy meals.Do you agree or disagree?

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It is often thought by some that in order to motivate people to consume a healthy diet
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the authority should impose tariff on unhealthy foodstuff items.I believe that imposing a duty on unhealthy meal itself cannot encourage people to have a healthy meal pattern.
To begin
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fast meal and oily snacks
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consumers have to pay more to buy those eatables.Lower and middle class people cannot afford a higher price of these meal items and they eventually reduce their consumption.
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an Upper class section of soviet will be unaffected of the price hike and they would continue to follow unhealthy diet style.So imposing sin tax on foods that are unhealthy is not a good solution to shift people towards healthy meals.
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 Conducting awareness classes among people regarding the devastating effects of unhealthy foods will be useful.
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 the number of fast food restaurants and unhealthy snack bars should be cut down to enable people to keep their physical health.For instance
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 a recent research conducted in India population in 2010 has revealed that banning of fast meal restaurants in certain regions of India has resulted in a reduction of fast meal consumption about 78 percent among people.
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 advertisements on sugary drinks, chips and snacks must be controlled to curb people’s inclination towards an unhealthy meal. To conclude, even though imposing tariff on unhealthy meals can reduce its consumption by some sections of soviet
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I think creating awareness among people, controlling advertisements on unhealthy meal and banning of fast god restaurants are more effective to motivate people to follow a good healthy meal style.

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