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some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is apent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree ?

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The level of education
system
 in our completely spending time for theory class only. Not getting enough time to learn practical knowledge. Absolutely am agreeing with
this
 opinion.
This
 is due to s
chooling
Suggestion
a schooling system
the schooling system
system
 in all over. Because every institution
concept
 factor of all the things. So many things we are learning from primary school to University, only the
concept
 side of it. We can not apply these things when we are entering into a job. Practical things are entirely different as compared to the
system
 things.
For example
, when we are going to an industry, we have to know all the ideology part of the working of all machines and equipment. If any one from industry worker told to operate the machine, the graduate student is not able to operate that. Because he only knows the theoretical working off that.
This
 is the main problem facing by all students. In my case I am an engineering graduate from mechanical stream. After completing my graduation, I joined a professional manufacturing company. From there one person showed me a measuring instrument and give one machined s
ector
Accept comma addition
sector, then
then
 he told to inspect that. I am completely stuck at that time,
b
Accept space
,
ecause am not able to use
this
 instrument to inspect.
c
oncept
Suggestion
Concept
wise, I know that the least count and what type of measurements can take.
This
 problem is not only for me, but
also
 for all students. To sum it up the things we have to change the s
chooling
Suggestion
school
system
 and to include more more practical works than the
concept
 f
rom
Suggestion
of
the beginning level of schooling
system
. It is worth for the future of all students for easy understanding how to apply
concept
 part into practical
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