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An increasing number of people are using the internet to meet new people and socialize. Some people think this has brought people closer together. Do you agree or disagree?

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An increasing number of people are using the
internet
 to meet new people and socialize. Some people think
this
 has brought people closer together. Do you agree or disagree? People are using
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 for many reasons. Some of them collect the information to study or just get informed. Some of them
use
 the
internet
 as a main source to do many activities like playing, online meeting, chatting and so on. Almost all people
use
 the
internet
 to
use
 social
medias which
Accept comma addition
media, which
media which
is
Suggestion
are
greatest
Suggestion
the greatest
 invention of technology. On the one hand, there are
number
Suggestion
a number
 of couples and families that they get acquainted
on
Suggestion
with
 social
medias
a means or instrumentality for storing or communicating information
media
.
Although
 they do not know the communicator at
first
, some of them are matching each other well. How people chat, what kind of messages they send, what kind of words they
use
 describe who they are. And people can input photos and write posts what they think. So it does not mean people do not know each other at all.
On the other hand
, there are a lot of fake accounts. So many cases that
girls
Suggestion
the girls
 were cheated by their online friends are checking by police. Cheating includes fraud, human trafficking and other crimes. The police
advice trusting
Accept comma addition
advice, trusting
 new online friends too much can lead to the worst thing that people can imagine. It is the one big drawback of meeting new people in social media.
Additionally
, nowadays, face to face discussion is getting less than online discussion. Even though there are pros and cons together, it is caused by people how they are using and what is their
purposes
Suggestion
purpose
. If they
use
 the social
medias
a means or instrumentality for storing or communicating information
media
 to meet new people and socialize consciously, it is not
bad idea
Suggestion
a bad idea
. The end must not be deceived by others. People just can have friend to chatting about their similar interests and foreign friends to know their culture and learn from each other. If people just pay attention more, they will understand how wonderful is using
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 to meet new people and have friends.

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