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The Internet when used as a source of information, has more drawbacks than advantages. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

#internet #source #information
It is often believed that using the
Internet
 as a source of
information
 is not beneficial because
this
 practice has many disadvantages. I personally disagree with
this
 point of view as I believe that the
Internet
 has given access to
the
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 large volume of valuable
information
 to the general
people
. First of all, relying on the
Internet
 for collecting
information
 has considerable benefits
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ordinary
people
. By using the
Internet
, they can easily find out necessary data which is very crucial for solving various problems.
While
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people
 face an obstacle in their daily
life
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, they can simply browse
google
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 to get a possible solution
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 the problem.
For example
, a group of young
people
of
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 my country used the
Internet
 to
know
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 how to get rid of unemployment and by using
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virtual instruction they started their own agricultural farm which enabled them to become successful entrepreneurs.
Although
 it is widely claimed that the
information
 available on the online platform is not always accurate,
overall
 enormous benefits can be driven by using
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online documents.
Secondly
,
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 knowledge is accessible to all classes of
people
. Nowadays
people
 can collect any data without spending money because of the availability of materials on the
Internet
. As most of the intelligence on the
internet
 is downloadable,
people
 not only get
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free access to a wide range of data
,
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 but
also
 can preserve the online resources for their future use.
For example
,
people
 can see job vacancies on the
Internet
, but previously
people
 had to subscribe
newspapers
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 to get
instruction
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 about vacancies.
Although
 fraudsters are using online platforms to circulate
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false
message
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messages
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,
people
 can easily trace the real
information
. In conclusion, despite having some
drawback
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 online instruction is advantageous to all classes of
people
 and it is easily accessible. I will recommend,
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