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The Internet when used as a source of information, has more drawbacks than advantages. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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It is often believed that using the
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 as a source of
information
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 is not beneficial because
this
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 practice has many disadvantages. I personally disagree with
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Internet
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 has given access to
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 large volume of valuable
information
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 to the general
people
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. First of all, relying on the
Internet
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 for collecting
information
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 has considerable benefits
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ordinary
people
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. By using the
Internet
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, they can easily find out necessary data which is very crucial for solving various problems.
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people
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 face an obstacle in their daily
life
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lives
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, they can simply browse
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 to get a possible solution
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 the problem.
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, a group of young
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 my country used the
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 to
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 how to get rid of unemployment and by using
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virtual instruction they started their own agricultural farm which enabled them to become successful entrepreneurs.
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 it is widely claimed that the
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 available on the online platform is not always accurate,
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 enormous benefits can be driven by using
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online documents.
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 knowledge is accessible to all classes of
people
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. Nowadays
people
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 can collect any data without spending money because of the availability of materials on the
Internet
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. As most of the intelligence on the
internet
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 is downloadable,
people
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 not only get
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free access to a wide range of data
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 but
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 can preserve the online resources for their future use.
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,
people
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 can see job vacancies on the
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, but previously
people
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 had to subscribe
newspapers
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to newspapers
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 to get
instruction
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instructions
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 about vacancies.
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 fraudsters are using online platforms to circulate
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false
message
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messages
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,
people
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 can easily trace the real
information
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. In conclusion, despite having some
drawback
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drawbacks
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 online instruction is advantageous to all classes of
people
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 and it is easily accessible. I will recommend,
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that the
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Misinformation
  • Fake news
  • Verification
  • Information overload
  • Privacy concerns
  • Screen time
  • Internet addiction
  • Credibility
  • Bias
  • Critical thinking
  • In-depth research
  • Peer-reviewed
  • Reliable sources
  • Data security
  • Skepticism
  • Discernment
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