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The internet has vastly increased our access to information. To what extent do you think this is a good thing? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The access to
information
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 has reached at its peak due to the
internet
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 Because of its significant effects on education and
economy I believe,
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the economy, I believe
the economy I believe,
this
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 is really a good thing. The use of
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internet
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the internet
 has soared to
such
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 an
extent
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extent, thus
thus
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 making it easy for the users to gather ample amount of
information
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 Students can collect data easily for research purpose. It has become far
easy
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easier
 for the teachers
to pass
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pass
 on
information
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 to their students via e-portals, e-logs and e-mails
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Institues
set up or lay the groundwork for
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 can communicate with their students through websites
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 Latest updates regarding admission criteria, selection results
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 rules and regulations and anything else are accessible to students all the time
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, online education is another important achievement
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, it has become possible for many distant learners to get
online education
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an online education
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 After the upsurge in use of wireless communication and smart phones, competition in business community has markedly increased. Because, nowadays consumers are well informed about all the products available in
market
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the market
. Generally people tend to search online and compare different products before buying.
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, companies have to offer multiple products with a range of characteristics at reasonable cost to attract their customers and to survive in
market
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the market
a market
. Access to online
information
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 has significantly boosted the global economy
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On the other hand
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besides
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 these advantages
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 if false
information
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 is spread on the
internet
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 it would have devastating impacts on society. It would create panic in many
situations
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situations, thus
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 leading to chaos. Still, relative authorities can handle it prudently with some effective strategies. To conclude,
internet
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 has considerably improved the approach to
information
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. As the two analysed reasons above, I strongly believe it to be very useful.

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