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People now have the freedom to work and live anywhere in the world due to the development of communication technology and transportation. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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These days, many people choose to live or task in other countries, which has been made possible because of convenience of air travel and modern communications.I believe that it has more benefits than drawbacks. The disadvantage of development is the distance is put between family members. It is true that air travel and devices, like Skype mean that communication and contact can be maintained. It is likely that a person will only be able to return one or two times a year during the holidays, and speaking on Skype or via email is not the same as face-to-face contact. Despite
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, there are significant advantages it can bring to people's likes.
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, it means that people have the opportunity to see other parts of the world and the way people live. For examples, people from the West of often go to work in Asia or Middle East and visa-versa.That's enriches many people's lives as they got to learn about other languages, tradition, culture and different ways of working in their own country. I would argue that
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 there are disadvantages of the current trend to live and industry abroad, they are outwitted by advantages. It can enrich people's lives and the lives of people in the countries that they move to
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • communication technology
  • transportation
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • freedom
  • work and live
  • development
  • increased job opportunities
  • flexibility
  • work-life balance
  • cultural exposure
  • diversity
  • economic growth
  • globalization
  • social isolation
  • loneliness
  • loss of community
  • sense of belonging
  • expensive cost of living
  • housing
  • strain on infrastructure
  • resources
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