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Society is becoming obsessed with material goods like fast cars,designer clothes and flashy jewellery. We have stopped caring about the important things and that is why divorce rates are high and family bonds are not as strong anymore;our value system is disintegrating.To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Fast growing modern world
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The fast growing modern world
 is finding it difficult to live a normal
life
 devoid of material goods.With the technological advancements, human
life
 has become more complicated and mechanical.
This
 gave an entirely different definition
to
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of
 quality of
life
. Human affinity towards materialistic
life
 is increasing day by day
,
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,
thus
 shifting the priority
from
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of
family relationships
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the family relationships
to
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of
 consumer goods
have been
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has been
 common.
This
inturn
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in turn
 destroying families leading to separated marriage
life
 and to more social consequences.I strongly go along with the ideology that one should give prime importance to family
,
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,
social
life
 rather than materialistic living.
Thus
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This
 essay will explicitly describe the effects of materials over human
life
 and its contexts of the writer in detail.
To begin
 with, the obsession towards the materialistic
life
 invites more bitter results than the minute status symbol they provide to the owner.Complete addiction leads to less human interpersonal relationships that will be carried
over to generations
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over generations
 in a habitual way.
For instance
, a husband who is always on the social platforms or a wife who spends large proportions of her day purchasing appealing attire and accessories will never be interested in marriage
life
 and true relationships and a silly maladjustment issue
leads
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lead
 to separated lives.
Subsequently
, the increased temptation towards status and prestige in society can cause serious economic losses in families.Thereby families or persons run out of financial stability and end up in
sevre
intensely or extremely bad or unpleasant in degree or quality
severe
 debts.
Infact these
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In fact, these
In fact these
affinity
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affinities
leads
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lead
 human minds to commit antisocial activities
such
 as robbery, assault and theft that ruins the entire generations.
Hence by
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Hence, by
 drawing
conclusion
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conclusions
a conclusion
the conclusion
, because of the serious consequences that destroy the moral values in society
,
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,
the writer strongly agrees that materialistic lifestyle ruins one's personal and social
life
.

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