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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other sorts of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The two maps illustrate how an isle was before and after the addition of some new buildings related to tourism. Overall, it can be clearly seen that the new planning for the reef fulfils it with tourism service buildings by constructing the accommodation, restaurant, reception, pier and getting some transporting boats. In terms of the old simple island, it only consists of some trees with the sea surrounding that peninsula and a small beach on the far west of it and as provided that it's whole length is about 200 meters Regarding the project of the new islet, it's dramatically full of buildings as the Reception situated in the west of the enclave before the beach , from there the tourists can go ahead by vehicle to the restaurant in the north through the vehicle track
that is
 starting from the new built pier going around the reception and extended to that restaurant ,
Furthermore
 there are accommodation places that are located on the both western and eastern sides of the reception having a footpath connecting it to the western ones (left one )and foot paths connecting each group ,reaching the door of each accomodation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic progress
  • standards of living
  • employment opportunities
  • national security
  • social progress
  • healthcare
  • education
  • social equality
  • social disparity
  • environmental sustainability
  • climate change
  • technological progress
  • cultural progress
  • quality of life
  • cultural heritage
  • national identity
  • social cohesion
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